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2015-07-06 · 첨삭 강사 Marie

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Hello, Teacher. Once in two weeks, I usually spend my weekend with my in-laws. This weekend, I went to my weekend farm with my in-laws. I had a nice day, and my son played with his cousins well. Oh, and I picked up several vegetables such as eggplant, cucumber, and lettuce. Anyway, see you tomorrow. Nowadays, daycare centers in Korea are under scrutiny due to some cases of child abuse. What would you do if you caught a teacher laying a hand on your child? How would you deal with that situation? First of all, I would take my son to a child psychiatric clinic. I surely agree with the opinion that the teacher who laid a had on my son has to be punished. However, as a mother, I want to put priority on healing my son's wounded heart. After I take proper measures to my son, I would see the person in charge at the daycare center, and demand to investigate the incident. If the person in charge doesn't show an earnest attitude, I would eventually report that daycare center to the police.

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Hi Kaylee! Thanks for sharing your opinion about our topic. Well, I agree that  the child\'s safety and wellness. should be prioritized. Of course, the child would be traumatized if he is being abused so it is really better to bring him to a psychiatric center to be properly taken care of. I am hoping that it will never happen to your child. Thanks for sharing! Ciao! ~Teacher Marie~ Hello, Teacher. >> CORRECT!   Once in two weeks, I usually spend my weekend with my in-laws.  >> Once every two weeks, I spend my weekend with my in-laws.  This weekend, I went to my weekend farm with my in-laws. >> This weekend, I went to a farm with my in-laws.  I had a nice day, and my son played with his cousins well. >> CORRECT!   Oh, and I picked up several vegetables such as eggplant, cucumber, and lettuce. >> CORRECT!  Anyway, see you tomorrow.>> CORRECT!  Nowadays, daycare centers in Korea are under scrutiny due to some cases of child abuse. What would you do if you caught a teacher laying a hand on your child? How would you deal with that situation?First of all, I would take my son to a child psychiatric clinic. >> CORRECT!   I surely agree with the opinion that the teacher who laid a had on my son has to be punished. >>  CORRECT! (hand) However, as a mother, I want to put priority on healing my son\'s wounded heart. >> CORRECT!  After I take proper measures to my son, I would see the person in charge at the daycare center, and demand to investigate the incident. >> CORRECT! >> or; After taking proper measures to my son, I would talk to the person in charge at the daycare center, and demand to investigate the incident.  If the person in charge doesn\'t show an earnest attitude, I would eventually report that daycare center to the police. >>  If the person in charge doesn\'t show an earnest attitude, I will eventually report that daycare center to the police.

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