Homework

Hello, Teacher. During the remaining summer vacation, I'm planning to write a letter of self-introduction which is needed to apply for a scholarship next year. I usually don't have enough time to prepare those documents during the semester. So, I'll prepare those documents in advance as much as I can. I'm going to submit some part of my writing instead of homework for the time being. Could you read and review some of my sentences? It's about my personal background. To deliver my personal background, I have to say two factors. One is deficiency that I had experienced in the past. And the other one is wealth of experience through the various roles given to me. subtitle : Deficiency! Driving Force of My Life Until I got a job after graduating from university, I had been raised in a humble family. Furthermore, my family was extremely conservative and traditional. Most of my family members including my grandparents had negative thoughts about women's education. (To be continued)

Hi Kaylee! I checked your sentences below. Please review them. Let me know if I misunderstood something. Have a good day! Ciao! ~Teacher Marie~ Hello, Teacher. >> CORRECT! During the remaining summer vacation, I\'m planning to write a letter of self-introduction which is needed to apply for a scholarship next year. >> CORRECT! I usually don\'t have enough time to prepare those documents during the semester. >> CORRECT! So, I\'ll prepare those documents in advance as much as I can. >> CORRECT! I\'m going to submit some part of my writing instead of my homework for the time being. >> CORRECT! Could you read and review some of my sentences? >> CORRECT! It\'s about my personal background. >> CORRECT! To deliver my personal background, I have to say two factors. >> To deliver my personal background, I have to mention two factors. One is deficiency that I had experienced in the past. >> One is a failure that I had experienced in the past.  And the other one is wealth of experience through the various roles given to me. >> CORRECT! Deficiency! >> Failure! Driving Force of My Life >> CORRECT! Until I got a job after graduating from university, I had been raised in a humble family. >> I had been raised in a humble environment until I got a job after university. Furthermore, my family was extremely conservative and traditional. >> CORRECT! Most of my family members, including my grandparents, had negative thoughts about women\'s education. >> CORRECT!