Homework

Hello, Teacher. In my writing of yesterday, I used 'deficiency' to describe my humble and poor environment. I'd like to ask you to advise a proper expression when you finish reading this. Below is the next part. Higher education for women was considered unnecessary in my extended family. The only family member who supported me to enter a university was my father. When I was naturally considering the entrance of vocational high school, my father said to me: "My daughter! It is true that there are not highly educated women in our extended family. But that can't be the reason that you give up going to university." By his words of encouragement, I had dreamed of entering a university and studying politics. After years of hard study, I was accepted to Dongguk University. Of course, it is not that my alma mater was a prestigious university. But I was satisfied with my result that I developed entirely on my own.(To be continued)

Hi Kaylee! I\'m still not sure why you used \'deficiency\' in yesterday\'s composition. ^^ Can you explain it further? Because having a deficiency means you lack something or something is incomplete or insufficient. Please review my corrections below. Ciao! ~Teacher Marie~ Hello, Teacher. >> CORRECT! In my writing of yesterday, I used \'deficiency\' to describe my humble and poor environment. >> In my writing yesterday, I used \'deficiency\' to describe my humble and poor environment. I\'d like to ask you to advise a proper expression when you finish reading this. >> CORRECT! Below is the next part. >> CORRECT! Higher education for women was considered unnecessary in my extended family. >> CORRECT! The only family member who supported me to enter a university was my father. >> CORRECT! When I was naturally considering the entrance of vocational high school, my father said to me: >> While I was considering entering a vocational high school, my father said to me: \"My daughter! It is true that there are not highly educated women in our extended family. >> CORRECT! >> not = no But that can\'t be the reason that you give up going to university.\" >> But that must not be the reason for you to give up going to the university. By his words of encouragement, I had dreamed of entering a university and studying politics. >> With his words of encouragement, I had dreamed of entering a university and studying politics. After years of hard study, I was accepted to Dongguk University. >> CORRECT! Of course, it is not that my alma mater was a prestigious university. >> CORRECT! But I was satisfied with my result that I developed entirely on my own. >> But I was satisfied with the results that I had achieved entirely on my own.