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2015-07-30 · 첨삭 강사 Jeny

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Hi Jeny I had the first class for IELTS. It was not used to study IELTS for me. But I had great time with you. Thank you for your sincerely attitude. See you next class. Bye^^ ------------------------------------- I think It is good for children to grow up in the countryside. There are so many reasons. I can suggest several things. At first, Eco-friendly environment affects children's health condition. Second, Good relationship in the countryside helps making positive human relationship. third, Slow life in the countryside adds to creative thinking for children. These are the reasons that I hand up for countryside than city.

강사 첨삭

Hello [이름],

Having the courage to push yourself in writing an essay can be a big step for you to improve your skills, even if the topics could be sometimes difficult. The most important thing to do is to create a plan and follow that plan. Start with your English learning goals, and then make a specific plan to succeed.

I\'ve created good sentences for our homework. That\'s good!!!!

Great day ahead!!!!

T. Jeny

 

 

Hi Jeny

>>correct
I had the first class for IELTS.

>>I ahd a firdst class in IELTS.

It was not used to study IELTS for me.

>>I am not used to studying IELTS.

But I had great time with you.

>>correct

Thank you for your sincerely attitude.
>>Thank you for your behavior.

See you next class. Bye^^
>>correct

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I think It is good for children to grow up in the countryside.

>>correct
There are so many reasons.

>>correct

 I can suggest several things.

>>correct
At first, Eco-friendly environment affects children\'s health condition.

>>correct
Second, Good relationship in the countryside helps making positive human relationship.

>>Secondly, having a good relationship in the countryside helps make a positive human relationship.

third, Slow life third, in the countryside adds to creative thinking for children.

>>Lastly, a slow pace of lifestyle improves children to be creative.
These are the reasons that I hand up for countryside than city.

>>These are the reasons that I prefer to live in the countryside than in the city

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