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Hello there [이름],
I hope you can achieve your dreams in the future. I know you want the best for your family.
You are really improving your skills in English, I commend you for expressing your opinion about our topic.
Nice job and keep it up!!!
T. Jeny
My ideal town is good environment for people to live.
>>My ideal town is having a good environment for people to live in.
I hope that there will be clean city, abundant resources, good social welfare and good school for my baby.
>>I hope that there will be a clean city with abundant resources, organize social welfare services and good schools for my baby.
I dream like these.
>>This is my dream.
I want to live there to spend my time with my family without any worry.
>>I want to live there to spend time with my family without any worries.
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