Homework(6/14): Essay "One of my closest friend"

2016-06-14 · 첨삭 강사 Jeny

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Dear sam. I am unhappy to hear that you couldn't take a enough sleep last night. Both on family and business, i hope you could solve the problem well. = body = You know I have many friend such as village friends, school friend, company colleagues and neighbors. But my closet and best friend is Mr.CHOI. His name is DongSeub Choi. When i was elementary school age,I met at a church. we are a close friend for 40 years more. We are sincere christian. Our future dream is a clergyman. Our situation in family was similar each other, For instance, father early passed away and mother, as widow, raised many children alone. and we all are poor. Despite these circumstances,we grew up brightly. He is public officer of railway. He is the elders of a church but i am an unbeliever. He is a member of regular meeting group including each wives. His hope and subject of pray is that i believe God again. His nick name is bear, it's GOM in Korean. I alway call him "GOM", not DongSeub. I am

강사 첨삭

Hello Oh,
Remember that learning English requires action. One small action is more powerful than reading hundreds of articles. Yes, we know it is very hard to do things, even if they are good for us.

I commend you for being so active and alert to listen and speak the language; continue that attitude because you can achieve many things in learning English.

Don\'t pull yourself down!!!!

T. Jeny

Dear sam.

>>correct
I am unhappy to hear that you couldn\'t take a enough sleep last night.

>>I am unhappy to hear that you couldn\'t take enough sleep last night.
Both on family and business, i hope you could solve the problem well.

>>correct
= body =
You know I have many friend such as village friends, school friends, company colleagues and neighbors.

>>correct
But my closet and best friend is Mr.CHOI.

>>But my closest and best friend is Mr.CHOI.
His name is DongSeub Choi.

>>correct

When i was elementary school age,I met at a church. we are a close friend for 40 years more.

>>When I was an elementary student, I met him at a church. We\'ve been close friends for more than 40 years.

We are sincere christian.

>>We are sincere Christians.

Our future dream is a clergyman.
>>Our future dream was to become a clergyman.
Our situation in family was similar each other, For instance, father early passed away and mother, as widow, raised many children alone.
>>We have the same family history, for instance, our fathers passed away early and our mothers raised many children, as widows, by their own efforts.
and we all are poor.

>>And we are all poor.
Despite these circumstances,we grew up brightly.
>>Despite these circumstances,we grew up in a right way.
He is public officer of railway.
>>He is a railway public officer.

He is the elders of a church but i am an unbeliever.

>>He is one of the elders in church but I am an unbeliever.
He is a member of regular meeting group including each wives.

>>He is a member of a regular meeting group including their wives.
His hope and subject of pray is that i believe God again.

>>He hopes and prays for me to believe in God again.
His nick name is bear, it\'s GOM in Korean.

>>correct
I always call him \"GOM\", not DongSeub.

>>correct

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