Homework(6/16): Necessity of art

Hello Oh,
Nice work, Oh!!! I was impressed on how you delivered your opinion about our topic today. Good job!!!

Dear [Name].

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Thanks for subject of the day.

>>Thanks for the subject of the day.
It\'s a very important theme these day in Korea.

>>It\'s a very important theme these days in Korea.
You know well that the nation’s education fever is so high.

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But It only dues to go famous university.

>>But it is only because they want to go to a famous university.
A lot of famous university exclude the subject such as art, physical education, nation\'s history and etc.

>>A lot of famous universities exclude subjects such as art, physical education, nation\'s history and etc.
For this reason, most of school - from elementary to middle and high one - don\'t teach the subjects.

>>For this reason, most schools - from elementary to middle and high schools - don\'t teach the subjects.

It is because that There is no advantage in point to enter university and student\'s parents also don\'t want it.

>>It is because there\'s no chance for the student to enter in university thus the parents don\'t want it.
Korea\'s future depends on education, therefore I think it will be very grim, dark.

>>Korea\'s future depends on education, therefore I think it will be very grim and dark.
We, as parents and adults, are responsible for this.
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We know that art and physical education are important at a lot of parts such as spiritual and physical health, creative thinking skill and more.

>>We know that art and physical education are important in many parts such as spiritual, physical health, creative thinking skill and more.
Those are future of Korea and those are future proud culture and important treasures for our descendants.
>>It can determine the future of Korea so we need to be proud of our culture and treasure our descendants.
Without art, Korea will be dead country.

>>Without art, Korea will be a dead country
See you next Monday, Thanks & regards.