Homework(6/22): leadership

2016-06-22 · 첨삭 강사 Jeny

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Dear sam. I am glad to start again new course and Thanks for being together with you. Thanks for your advice to improve my English skill. You said that i have to get a book and read it aloud , i feel same with you. I bought a short story some months ago, It is "Tolstoy's short stories". There are two stories in that book, one is "What men live by" and another is "Ivan the fool". I am reading the book, but i have not finished reading the book. ha ha. I am so lazy, ain't I? See you Friday. = body = In my opinion, people don't automatically have leadership, They have to make a ceaseless effort to get a ability. To do this, they must have a open mind, listen to other's opinion and learn how to be leadership. A unwise and not ready leader can break a organization. In other world, a foolish president can break a country either in our or your country. Therefor people must vote well not to be elected such leader. Therefore,

강사 첨삭

Hi there! I received your composition. Great job for doing your homework!

I hope you\'ll be consistently diligent in all the tasks I\'m giving you.

Keep on writing!

Here are the corrections I made for you

~T. Jeny~

 

Dear sam.

>>correct
I am glad to start again new course and Thanks for being together with you.

>>I am glad to start  new course with you again. Thank you!
Thanks for your advice to improve my English skill.

>>correct
You said that i have to get a book and read it aloud , i feel same with you.

>>You said that i have to get a book and read it aloud , also feel the same.
I bought a short story some months ago, It is \"Tolstoy\'s short stories\".

>>correct
There are two stories in that book, one is \"What men live by\" and another is \"Ivan the fool\".

>>correct
I am reading the book, but i have not finished reading the book. ha ha.

>>correct
I am so lazy, ain\'t I?

>>correct
See you Friday.
>>correct
= body =
In my opinion, people don\'t automatically have leadership, They have to make a ceaseless effort to get a ability.

>>In my opinion, people don\'t automatically have leadership, They have to make a ceaseless effort to get the ability.
To do this, they must have a open mind, listen to other\'s opinion and learn how to be leadership.

>>To do this, they must have an open mind, listen to others opinion and learn how to be leader.
A unwise and not ready leader can break a organization.

>>An unwise and not ready a leader can break a organization.
In other world, a foolish president can break a country either in our or your country.

>>In other words, a foolish president can break a country either in our or your country.
Therefor people must vote well not to be elected such leader.
>>Therefore people should vote wisely to elect a good leader

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