Homework 6/25
학생이 쓴 원문
These days in Korea Brolstars (phone game) is popular among us. I think we usually don’t play with toys but we play with phone.
강사 첨삭
Hello Monica! Thank you for this. It\'s because of technology, Children don\'t go out and play but rather just be at home playing computer or phone games.
- T. Beth
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These days in Korea Brolstars (phone game) is popular among us. >>> correct ( These days in Korea, Brolstars (phone game) is popular among us. )
>>> OR: These days in Korea, a phone game called Brolstar is popular among kids my age.
I think we usually don’t play with toys but we play with phone.
>>> correct
>>> OR: I think children are more into phone games than playing with toys.
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