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강사 첨삭
Good Day! Thank you for your homework.
I really admire your perseverance.
And it paid off because you are now licensed in own field.
You are a good example for other people.
Keep it up!
Have a great day!
-Teacher Jeny-
ESSAY: What influences you to make good choices?
>>correct
Bad experiences based on my life such as mistake make me to choose good choices.
>>Bad experiences in my life such as mistakes helped me choose good choices.
Although I had got suffering and hard time at that time, it makes me avoiding from the same situation and chooses better choices.
>>Although I suffered and had a hard time at that time, it prevented me to be in the same situation and it made chose better choices.
For example, if I ordered a food with purple color and the taste was terrible, I would choice other color dishes when I needed to ask supplying me.
>>For example, if I ordered food with purple color and the taste was terrible, I would choose other colored dishes.
Or indirect experience through Youtube, internet and books can influence me having better choices.
>>In addition, indirect experiences through Youtube, internet, and books can influence me having better choices.
It is also the same reason that I mentioned before.
>> It is also the same reason that I mentioned awhile ago.
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