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All people work in their work places every day. I think they want to earn money to live an affluent life. In life, most of people meet unexpected moment all of sudden like learning, curing of health, etc. When they have what they want to eat and what they want to do something, money can meet theirs needs. I also hope to get and save enough money for a sudden situation or my wish. In my case, I'm working at a coffee shop as a part-timer until finding job to make ends meet. My salary is being used for learning and grooming. Likewise, others will have similar reasons to live rich life.

Hi [이름]! ^^ Thank you for your opinion to the composition topic.^^ You expressed yourself quite clearly however we needed to adjust some vocabulary used to help the essay be more exact or articulate. ^^ Good job all in all!   All good things, ==Teacher Charlie==     All people work in their work places every day. >> Most people attend to their jobs everyday.   I think they want to earn money to live an affluent life. >> I think they want to earn enough money to lead an affluent life.   In life, most of people meet unexpected moment all of sudden like learning, curing of health, etc. When they have what they want to eat and what they want to do something, money can meet theirs needs. >> In life, most people face situations wherein they have to make ends meet like paying school fees, health insurance and the like, but when they have met their basic needs, the money they make is enough.   I also hope to get and save enough money for a sudden situation or my wish. >> I also hope to earn enough money for any unplanned situations or for my personal wishes.   In my case, I\'m working at a coffee shop as a part-timer until finding job to make ends meet. >> In my case, I work part-time at a coffee shop until I find a job that could make ends meet.   My salary is being used for learning and grooming. Likewise, others will have similar reasons to live rich life. >> My salary is being used for my education and my own vanities. Others also have similar reasons to live a prosperous life.