Homework
학생이 쓴 원문
Hello, teacher.
My summer vacation came to a close now.
Today is the first day of my classes this semester.
Please, wish me luck with my classes this semester.
Is it acceptable for parents to use physical force to discipline their children? Why or why not?
I totally disagree with the opinion that parents can use physical force to discipline their children.
In order to use physical force effectively, parents should have the temperance and patience.
It's because they could lose their self-control while using physical force to their children.
However, having and growing self-control is not that easy.
Moreover, I'm really worrying about that children could feel deeply wounded by their parents' using physical force.
I think there is a better way to solve children's problems although I understand using physical force is easy way for children to discipline.
강사 첨삭
Hello Kaylee! Thanks for putting in your two cents about this. Our method of disciplining our children could harshly affect their personality and future interactions with other people. Using physical force might seem easy and effective, but, like what you said, it could leave an unseen wound in our children\'s hearts. Good job!
Ciao!
~Teacher Marie~
Hello, teacher.
>> CORRECT! My summer vacation came to a close now.
>> My summer vacation came to an end.
Today is the first day of my classes this semester.
>> CORRECT! Please, wish me luck with my classes this semester.
>> CORRECT!
I totally disagree with the opinion that parents can use physical force to discipline their children.
>> CORRECT! In order to use physical force effectively, parents should have the temperance and patience.
>> CORRECT! It\'s because they could lose their self-control while using physical force to their children.
>> CORRECT!
>> to = onHowever, having and growing self-control is not that easy.
>> However, having and maintaining self-control is not that easy.
Moreover, I\'m really worrying about that children could feel deeply wounded by their parents\' using physical force.
>> Moreover, I\'m really worried that children could feel deeply wounded by their parents\' use of physical force.I think there is a better way to solve children\'s problems although I understand using physical force is easy way for children to discipline.
>> Although I understand that using physical force is easier, I think there is a better way to solve problems with children and to discipline them.
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