homework^^

People believe that success in life comes from taking risks or chance. many people might think that success depends on result of success from experience. In my opinion, success always comes from bitter experience. seen from my experience, when I got good result or success I had previous experience. For example when I prepared an exam for a qualification I could pass the exam after having experience of failure two times. Before taking an exam I didn't realize that I was insufficient and I depressed myself for a long time. However I noticed my state and that experience let me know the importance of taking risk. Of course, if something will be successful without any failure that will be good but that is not only difficult but also not helpful to people in their lives. like my experience, failure can tell us important thing and ignored thing then it lead better situation later. Moreover, many speakers often give a lecture about this. So, I believe taking risk is positive for success

Hello [이름]! ^^   Thank you for your well-thought out composition about the topic presented. ^^ Most of the corrections made were to help with the eloquence of the essay so that your opinion would be expressed with more clarity. ^^ Good job all in all!   See you in class!   All good things, ==Teacher Charlie==       People believe that success in life comes from taking risks or chance. >> Most people believe that success in life comes from taking risks or chances. many people might think that success depends on result of success from experience. In my opinion, success always comes from bitter experience. >> A lot of people might think that success depends on previous achievements, however, in my opinion, success always comes from bitter experience.   seen from my experience, when I got good result or success I had previous experience. >> Basing on my experience, I get good results or successes if I have previous experience.   For example when I prepared an exam for a qualification I could pass the exam after having experience of failure two times. >> For example, when I only passed a qualifying exam I took after failing it twice.   Before taking an exam I didn\'t realize that I was insufficient and I depressed myself for a long time. >> Before retaking the exam, I didn\'t realize that I was insufficiently prepared and felt depressed for some time.   However I noticed my state and that experience let me know the importance of taking risk. >>However, I self-reflected and came to know the importance of taking risks. >>OR: However, I came into grips with myself and figured out the importance of taking risks.   Of course, if something will be successful without any failure that will be good but that is not only difficult but also not helpful to people in their lives. >> Of course, it would be ideal if someone would attain success without failures however this is not only difficult to achieve but  it is not helpful in one\'s life.   like my experience, failure can tell us important thing and ignored thing then it lead better situation later. >> Like in my experience, failures teach us what is important and what should be ignored to be able to be in a better situation later.   Moreover, many speakers often give a lecture about this. So, I believe taking risk is positive for success >> Moreover, many motivational speakers give lectures about this topic therefore, I believe that taking risks is advisable to achieve success.