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I want to have a smart phone. Beacuse all of my friends have a smart phone, and smart phone have more good function than folder phone. There are games, dictonary, and cacao talk. In my elementary school there are band who has a smart phone.And it is more easy to use.
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Good morning [이름]!
Having a smartphone seems to be the trend of the future wireless communication.
A smartphone has a lot of benefits and one of these is the immediate access to data online whether at home or outside.
Life became more convenient with this.
Thanks for sending this in. See you tomorrow.
~Teacher Shanee
I want to have a smart phone.
>>> Correct!
Beacuse all of my friends have a smart phone, and smart phone have more good function than folder phone.
>>> Correct! Because all of my friends have a smart phone and a smartphone has more better functions than a folder phone.
There are games, dictonary, and cacao talk.
>>> Some applications that can be installed are games, dictionaries and KakaoTalk.
In my elementary school there are band who has a smart phone.
>>> In my elementary school, there is a band who has a smartphone. [I\'m not sure what you\'re trying to say here.]
And it is more easy to use.
>>> OR: And it is easier to use.
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