homework
학생이 쓴 원문
강사 첨삭
Hello [이름],
Having the courage to push yourself in writing an essay can be a big step for you to improve your skills, even if the topics could be sometimes difficult. The most important thing to do is to create a plan and follow that plan. Start with your English learning goals, and then make a specific plan to succeed.
I believe that you can create better sentences now but you have to be careful of your sentence construction.
Be mindful of your corrections so that you\'ll not commit the same mistake.
Great day ahead!!!!
T. Jeny
Yes, I agree with that people rely too much on computers.
>>Yes, I agree that people rely on computers too much.
Without computers, we certainly feel uncomfortable.
>>We certainly feel uncomfortable without computers.
Our social system made of computer.
>>Our social system is made up of computer.
Every thing controls by computer.
>>Everything is controlled by the computer.
We can not imagine the world except of computers.
>>We can not imagine the world without computers.
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