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2015-09-16 · 첨삭 강사 Rose

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All toddler's life is same. Eating, excreting and sleeping are repeated all day. So I think this time is not real life. I think when child can walk and speak long and certain sentence is the real begin of life. Because they have rational thinking and they make a decision by theirselves. They live their own life. So when people have rational thinking is the begin of their life.

강사 첨삭

Whoa! What a great composition!

Thanks for this!

I think real life begins when we can feel like we are a part of this world.

When we serve our purpose, we can say that we exist.

All toddler\'s life is same.

>>Everything in toddler\'s life is the same.

Eating, excreting and sleeping are repeated all day.

>>CORRECT!

So I think this time is not real life.

>> So I think that time is not the beginning of real life.

I think when child can walk and speak long and certain sentence is the real begin of life.

>>I think when a child can walk and speak long and certain sentence is the real beginning of life.

Because they have rational thinking and they make a decision by theirselves.

>>Because they have rational thinking and they make a decision by themselves.

They live their own life.

>>CORRECT!

So when people have rational thinking is the begin of their life.

>>Therefore, when people have rational thinking, that is the beginning of their life.

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