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2015-09-18 · 첨삭 강사 Rose

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Actually I am interested in technology. One of my dreams is traveling the universe. To achive my goal, development in science technology is indispensable. Also I want to have baby skin. So I always wait develpment in skin treatment technology. We can't improve our life without technology. So I'm interested in technology.

강사 첨삭

Hi there, Adam!

Technology is good, if used in a good way~

Have a great Friday!

Actually I am interested in technology.

>>Actually, I am interested in technology.
One of my dreams is traveling the universe.

>>CORRECT!
To achive my goal, development in science technology is indispensable.

>> To achieve my goal, development in science technology is indispensable.

Also I want to have baby skin.

>>I also want to have baby skin.

So I always wait develpment in skin treatment technology.

>>So I always wait for development in skin treatment technology.
We can\'t improve our life without technology.

>>CORRECT!

So I\'m interested in technology.

>>Therefore, I\'m interested in technology.

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