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That period is really important to take their course in life however that is hard time to lead them. Because they are in puberty, already have problems enough. "storm and stress", as people say they wander during that time and even defy adult's advice. Because of this, they can miss this time and need help from parents or other adult. Of course parents don't have to give a help too much. I think I'll suggest guideline to find good way by themselves rather than giving answer. I believe it will be certainly help them to grow

Hi [이름]!   Thank you for a wonderfully written essay. ^^ Though it would be better to introduce the topic first before expressing your thoughts so that the reader will not be confused. Giving details could be tiring but it does improve the fluency and expressiveness of an essay; much like what most of the corrections made have done. Good job all in all. ~~ Have a happy weekend!   All good things, ==Teacher Charlie==       That period is really important to take their course in life however that is hard time to lead them. Because they are in puberty, already have problems enough. >>Parents or other adult relatives should make important decisions for their older (15 to 18 year-old) teenage children. Although it could be hard to guide older teenage children since they want to be independent or make their own way in life besides, puberty cause them enough problems. \"storm and stress\", as people say they wander during that time and even defy adult\'s advice. Because of this, they can miss this time and need help from parents or other adult. >> Adolescence is a period of heightened \"storm and stress\" as people say wherein they wander and become disobedient to adults. This may lead to them missing out out on help from their parents or others.   Of course parents don\'t have to give a help too much. >> Of course, parents\' don\'t have to help them that much. >> OR: Of course, parents\' musn\'t help them too much.   I think I\'ll suggest guideline to find good way by themselves rather than giving answer. I believe it will be certainly help them to grow >> If it were up to me, I would suggest guidelines for them to find their way rather than giving outright answers. I believe this will certainly help them grow.