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What I though about women in the military is natural as citizen of country. Basically, I think women also have to contribute to strengthen the national defense. As far as I know, women can volunteer for military service in Korea and it's not mandatory in contrast with men. I'm not sure that which country have rule of duty of military service for women. I convince most country don't have it. it might consider femininity to women and emphasis. it is quite sensitive subject as much as some of people who served in the army claim that it's not fair moreover people even point out present state of women soldier. I think we need to improve recognition of army first, and government have to rearrange binding and concept.

Hello [이름]! Good work on your essay! I definitely agree with your opinion. I got the jist of it however, we need to work on the terminology you used. ^^ I did my best in understanding what you meant in the last three sentences. This shows the importance of completing a thought, even if sounds repetitive it is important to point out the subject that you are mentioning. Also, try to use synonyms carefully. It may be a synonym of a word but it might not make a sentence clear. ^^ However, good job all in all!   Have an awesome Chuseok! ^^ 추석 잘 보내세요!   All good things, ==Teacher Charlie==   What I though about women in the military is natural as citizen of country. >> What I think of women being in the military is as natural as being a citizen of a country. Basically, I think women also have to contribute to strengthen the national defense. >> Basically, I think women also have to contribute in strengthening a country\'s national defense. As far as I know, women can volunteer for military service in Korea and it\'s not mandatory in contrast with men. I\'m not sure that which country have rule of duty of military service for women. I convince most country don\'t have it. >> As fas as I know, women in Korea can volunteer in the military service and it\'s not mandatory unlike that of men. I\'m not sure if there are countries that impose military service for women so I am convinced that it does not exist in most countries. it might consider femininity to women and emphasis. it is quite sensitive subject as much as some of people who served in the army claim that it\'s not fair >> It is quite a sensitive subject that it might be considered a form of discrimination against women since some people who served in the army claim that it is not fair. moreover people even point out present state of women soldier. I think we need to improve recognition of army first, and government have to rearrange binding and concept. >> Moreover, people put emphasis on the state of how women soldiers are treated. I think we need to recognize the importance of the army first then the government has to work to unify the army\'s opinion and rethink the concept of women being in the army.