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2015-09-30 · 첨삭 강사 Jane

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Happiness is a money. If I have a lot of money, I want to do everything. Although something is more important than money. sometimes I feel another things rather than moeny. But I think having money is a big role for the happiness.

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Hi there, [이름]! Thank you for your composition! Well, money plays a big role in our life. It may not be everything, but it makes many things possible. When I was young, I didn\'t know this fact. But as I age, I get to realize its growing importance. We just have to remember though that no matter how important money is, we should not let it control us. We should still be in control. T. JanE ^^ Happiness is a money.>> Happiness is having much money. If I have a lot of money, I want to do everything.>> If I have a lot of money, I can do many things. Although something is more important than money.>> However, there are other things that are more important than money. sometimes I feel another things rather than moeny.>> Sometimes, I need other things instead of money. But I think having money is a big role for the happiness. >> But I think that money has an important role in having a happy life.  

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