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2015-09-30 · 첨삭 강사 Charlie

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Most people live with neighbors. They have to have the qualities in order that people become a good neighbor. I believe that they must have unselfish and etiquette, Recently, we can find issue of discord with the neighbors on the news. Noise complaint issue is a typical example and all incidents about it was devoid of these. And in case of my house, we had problem of water leak from upside house. While figure out the cause of the water leak, my parents had a conflict. It seems the present state of relationship with the neighbors. In this way, it maybe quite difficult for mordern people to leave together but if people give consideration to others it would be definitely better.

강사 첨삭

Hello [이름]! ^^   Good work with your composition. ~~~ Just try not to confuse the usage of \"leaving\" (to go) and \"living\" (to exist) . ^^   You did very well all in all. ^^   All good things, ==Teacher Charlie==   Most people live with neighbors. They have to have the qualities in order that people become a good neighbor. >> Most people live with neighbors and they have to have the qualities in order to become good neighbors.   I believe that they must have unselfish and etiquette, Recently, we can find issue of discord with the neighbors on the news. >> I believe that in order to become good neighbors, they should be unselfish and civilized. Recently, there is news about discord between neighbors. Noise complaint issue is a typical example and all incidents about it was devoid of these. >> Noise complaint is a typical issue which is the root cause of most incidents.   And in case of my house, we had problem of water leak from upside house. While figure out the cause of the water leak, my parents had a conflict. It seems the present state of relationship with the neighbors. >> In our case, we had a problem with a water leak coming from the upper floor and while figuring out the cause of this, my parents got into a conflict which resulted into where their relationship stands today. In this way, it maybe quite difficult for mordern people to leave together but if people give consideration to others it would be definitely better. >> From this, it could be quite difficult for people nowadays to live together but if people are considerate towards each other it would definitely be better.

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