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2015-10-01 · 첨삭 강사 Carmen

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HOMEWORK FOR TODAY: Say something about a devastating situation that you have encountered in a maximum of 5 sentences. It is so sudden question to me, of course there are many devastating situations that I encountered, but I can't remember right now, so I will talk about my recent memory. When I was a minor(under age), I thought that if I am 20, I can live my own life, and I can do all of things by my own power, and I can enjoy the freedom. But now I am 20, I'm still received my parents help, and I'm still doing like a kid, and I'm still under of my parents(no freedom), there are still a lot that I will do. And now I knew again that adults have much more works and worries than kids. And now I'm trying to be a wonderful adult, and it was a devastating situation that I have encountered recently.

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 An awesome day to you, [이름]! Thank you for always being active in our class! You always inspire me to be happy and enthusiastic. I also look forward to hearing your stories so I encourage you to write and speak more in English. I can really feel that you are a great person inside and out. So continue striving for more in your life because I know that you will succeed in whatever you do just as long as you put your mind into it! :) See you! :*   With love, Teacher Carmen <3   It is so sudden question to me, of course there are many devastating situations that I encountered, but I can\'t remember right now, so I will talk about my recent memory. >> This is a suprising question for me. >> Of course, there are many devastating situations that I have encountered, but I can\'t remember them right now, so I will just talk about something recent from my memory.   When I was a minor(under age), I thought that if I am 20, I can live my own life, and I can do all of things by my own power, and I can enjoy the freedom. >> When I was still a minor, I thought that what if I am already 20 years old and I can live my own life, do things beyond my power and enjoy my freedom.   But now I am 20, I\'m still received my parents help, and I\'m still doing like a kid, and I\'m still under of my parents(no freedom), there are still a lot that I will do. >>But now that I am 20, I still receive help from my parents and act like a kid. I am still under my parents and still there are a lot of things that I need to do.   And now I knew again that adults have much more works and worries than kids. >> And I realize that there are so much work and worries an adult has to face compared to a kid.   And now I\'m trying to be a wonderful adult, and it was a devastating situation that I have encountered recently. >> I am trying to be a wonderful person and it is a devastating situation that I encounter everyday.

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