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2015-10-02 · 첨삭 강사 Charlie

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I agree that many media pay too much attention to the personal lives of famous people. Today, we can hear their news easily and detailedly even though we don't know them personally. It is applicable most famous people including celebrities and it seems there is no privacy. I know that reporters are on duty however, I think celebrities are really damaged by coverage. And after being developed SNS, it's getting serious more and more. Although we don't want to find this kind of news, the news always come in sight. For example, a famous couple who are really popular in Korea didn't announce their breaking up but the press gave prominent coverage. Until now, there are lots of a speculative article about them. As I take it, the media look like they want to see that couple's breaking. From this, the media invade famous people's privacy.

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Hello [이름]! ^^   Thank you for your well written essay. ^^ You can definitely be counted on to give much thought on your essays and this is good if you want to get ahead in learning English. ~~~ I am curious which celebrity couple you were referring to...it could either be Lee Min Ho and Suzy Park or G-Dragon and Mizuhara Kiko. ㅋㅋㅋ   See you in class!   All good things, ==Teacher Charlie==   I agree that many media pay too much attention to the personal lives of famous people. >> I agree that the media pays too much attention to the personal lives of famous people.   Today, we can hear their news easily and detailedly even though we don\'t know them personally. It is applicable most famous people including celebrities and it seems there is no privacy. >> Today, we can get news easily and in detail about people we don\'t know and this includes celebrities which seems to be invasion of their privacy.   I know that reporters are on duty however, I think celebrities are really damaged by coverage. And after being developed SNS, it\'s getting serious more and more. Although we don\'t want to find this kind of news, the news always come in sight. >> I know that reporters are only doing their jobs however, I think celebrities get hurt by this kind of coverage and after the development of SNS, it has gotten more and more serious where even if we don\'t want this kind of news, it always abounds. For example, a famous couple who are really popular in Korea didn\'t announce their breaking up but the press gave prominent coverage. Until now, there are lots of a speculative article about them. >> For example, a celebrity couple here in Korea didn\'t announce their break-up but the press gave it such a prominent coverage that there are still speculation articles about them.    As I take it, the media look like they want to see that couple\'s breaking. From this, the media invade famous people\'s privacy. >> I take it as the media liking to see the break-up of this couple and from this, I could say that the media does invade celebrities\' privacy.

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