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2015-10-05 · 첨삭 강사 Jeny

학생이 쓴 원문

There is a traditional idea of Korea that is respecting men and disparaging women. Now that kind of thought is getting fade away. But there is a little bit idea. When women give a baby, they want to have men. Their parent also want to have men baby. Some women continually have pregnant until having a boy. That is one reason that the Korea old big family have many children. Nowadays, the most problem of modern society in Korea is low birthrate. But young married couple have a few baby regardless of boy or girl.

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There is a traditional idea of Korea that is respecting men and disparaging women.

>>There is a traditional idea in Korea about respecting men and disparaging women.
Now that kind of thought is getting fade away.

>>Now, that kind of thinking is fading away.
But there is a little bit idea.

>>But there is a value that is still existing.
When women give a baby, they want to have men. Their parent also want to have men baby.

>>When women give birth, they want to have a baby boy, as well as their parents.

Some women continually have pregnant until having a boy.

>>Some women want to get pregnant again until they will have a boy.
That is one reason that the Korea old big family have many children.

>>That is one of the reasons why, Korean families are big.
Nowadays, the most problem of modern society in Korea is low birthrate.

>>The biggest problem in Korea, in our modern society is low birthrate.
But young married couple have a few baby regardless of boy or girl.

>>But young married couples have fewer babies now regardless of it\'s gender.

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