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2015-10-07 · 첨삭 강사 Charlie

학생이 쓴 원문

I'm not sure which one is prefer in life, but if I have a chance to have that kind of experience I would move to another place. Since I originally enjoy have new experience and I believe it would be helpful in my life. Through having opportunities that move to other place, people can expand their horizons. In my case, my parents have settled down in my hometown by my father's work. So I live here until now however I often used to go out to other region with friend since when I was young. On the other hand, there are different view points of this. Some others prefer to live in one place and they might importantly consider stability in their hometown. Personally, I want to live many places before prime of life then I hope to come back to my hometown.

강사 첨삭

Hello [이름]! ^^   Thank you for your wonderful essay. ^^ Yes, striking while the iron is hot is a good way to expand an individual\'s horizons. ~~ It\'s too bad we couldn\'t have class today as well as on Friday since it\'s 한글날 ^^   See you next week!   All good things, ==Teacher Charlie==   I\'m not sure which one is prefer in life, but if I have a chance to have that kind of experience I would move to another place. Since I originally enjoy have new experience and I believe it would be helpful in my life. Through having opportunities that move to other place, people can expand their horizons. >> I\'m not sure which one would be better in life but if I had a chance, I would move to another place since I really enjoy having new experiences and I believe that it would be helpful in my life because people can can expand their horizons by getting opportunities by moving to other places.   In my case, my parents have settled down in my hometown by my father\'s work. So I live here until now however I often used to go out to other region with friend since when I was young. >> As for me, my parents settled down in my hometown because of my father\'s work so I have been living here until now but when I was younger, I used to often go to other regions with my friends.   On the other hand, there are different view points of this. Some others prefer to live in one place and they might importantly consider stability in their hometown. Personally, I want to live many places before prime of life then I hope to come back to my hometown. >> On the other hand, there are difference points of view about this; some people prefer to live in one place because they consider stability a priority. Personally, I want to try living in different places before I have passed the prime of life, thereafter, I hope to retire in my hometown.

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