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2015-10-19 · 첨삭 강사 Charlie

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I agree with this statement. If people have specific goal, they have to try to achieve it and don't have to give up. I believe everything depends on state of mind. However many others might contradict this I said. They might think that they are not sure about success in their situation. I know that there can be impediments such as worry and frustration. But continual endeavors will produced a successful result. For example, there are many disabled persons who had an accident. even though they got big problem, they never give up their life. They give us good message not to give up our goals. So, if we meet any difficult, we don't give up. And then we will finally get result.

강사 첨삭

Hello [이름]! ^^   You did very well in our class today! ~~~ You also did very well in writing your opinion about the presented topic.^^   All good things, ==Teacher Charlie==     I agree with this statement. If people have specific goal, they have to try to achieve it and don\'t have to give up. >> I agree with the statement \"never give up\" because if people have specific goals, the should try to achieve and not give up on them.   I believe everything depends on state of mind. However many others might contradict this I said. >> I believe that everything depends on a person\'s state of mind although other\'s might dispute this.   They might think that they are not sure about success in their situation. >> They are doubtful in being successful in their situation.   I know that there can be impediments such as worry and frustration. But continual endeavors will produced a successful result. >> I know that there are impediments such as worry and frustration but continuous endeavors will produce a successful result.   For example, there are many disabled persons who had an accident. even though they got big problem, they never give up their life. >> For example, there are a lot of people who have been handicapped by accidents but even though they have faced obstacles, they never gave up on life.   They give us good message not to give up our goals. So, if we meet any difficult, we don\'t give up. And then we will finally get result. >> They are an inspiration to us not to give up on our goals. So if we face any difficulties, we mustn\'t give up to finally get a good result.

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