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2015-10-28 · 첨삭 강사 Rose

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I want to be a spiderman. He can fly with spidet web. He flies in building forest. It looks very fun. When I watched that movie first, I really envied him because He can enjoy beautiful view at the top of the empire state building. Then, watching beautiful America view became my dream. So I want to be a spiderman.

강사 첨삭

Okay! Ha! Ha!

In my case I like Ironman ;)

Enjoy being Spiderman, Adam!

I want to be a spiderman.

>>I want to be Spiderman.

 He can fly with spidet web.

>> He can fly using his spider web.

He flies in building forest.

>>He flies in a forest of buildings.

 It looks very fun.

>> It looks fun.

When I watched that movie first, I really envied him because He can enjoy beautiful view at the top of the empire state building.

>>When I watched that movie for the first time, I really envied him because he could enjoy the beautiful view at the top of the Empire State Building.
Then, watching beautiful America view became my dream.

>>Then, seeing the beautiful America became my dream.

 So I want to be a spiderman.

>>Therefore, I want to be Spiderman

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