homework
학생이 쓴 원문
Face-to-face communication is much more effective to deliver any fact or honest to others. As technology develops, people have been using many types of communication. Especially with the advent of smartphones, most people have always been with SNS like Facebook, and kakao talk. As for me, I had an experience of inconvenience of communication through using message. While I was talking with friend she misunderstood my words in that situation. So I had to explain about it as calling her later. People don't know others facial expression while they are talking with each other during using those things that's why it can often cause trouble. However nowadays most communication programs are having useful emoticon that represent people's statement. I think it is really excellent invention. Through using it on text message we can show our statement to others well. As a result, face-to-face communication is obviously the best.
강사 첨삭
Hello [이름]! ^^
Wow, this must be the longest essay you\'ve ever written so you must have strong opinions about this topic. ~~~
Good job in writing out your opinion in detail. Keep it up.
All good things,
==Teacher Charlie==
Face-to-face communication is much more effective to deliver any fact or honest to others.
>> Face-to-face communication, in my opinion, is much more effective in stating a fact or expressing honesty to others.
As technology develops, people have been using many types of communication. Especially with the advent of smartphones, most people have always been with SNS like Facebook, and kakao talk.
>> As technology developed, people have been using different kinds of communication media, especially in the advent of smartphones, SNS like Facebook and Kakaotalk have been included in this list.
As for me, I had an experience of inconvenience of communication through using message. While I was talking with friend she misunderstood my words in that situation. So I had to explain about it as calling her later.
>> Personally, I experienced the inconvenience of communicating through instant messaging while I was talking to a friend. She misunderstood what I meant to say so I had to call her to explain myself.
People don\'t know others facial expression while they are talking with each other during using those things that\'s why it can often cause trouble.
>> People don\'t see others facial expressions while talking on the phone and this often causes trouble.
However nowadays most communication programs are having useful emoticon that represent people\'s statement. I think it is really excellent invention. Through using it on text message we can show our statement to others well. As a result, face-to-face communication is obviously the best.
>> However, nowadays, most instant messenger programs have useful emoticons that go with a person\'s statement. I think this is a really excellent invention because through these emoticons, we can clearly show what we mean to others. Therefore, face-to-face communication is still obviously the best.
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