homework
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Too much drinking is harmful to our physical, emtional, and financial health. Alcohol is especially bad for the liver. Also drinking alcohol is exprnsive because we eat lots of foods with alcohol. We should drink alcohol properly.
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That is why you have to avoid drinking too much!
Steer clear from alcohol and you will do just fine^^
\"Financial health\" made me laugh, though~
Too much drinking is harmful to our physical, emtional, and financial health.
>>Too much drinking is harmful to our physical, emotional, and financial health.
Alcohol is especially bad for the liver.
>>Alcohol is bad especially for the liver.
Also drinking alcohol is exprnsive because we eat lots of foods with alcohol.
>>Moreover, drinking alcohol is expensive because we eat lots of foods with it.
We should drink alcohol properly.
>>We should drink alcohol moderately.
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