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2015-11-05 · 첨삭 강사 Rose

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I have a mentor. He was a chairman of samsung though he retired last year. We met once a month and had a conversation. There were 10 students including me. He taught a lot of things about our appropriate action. That was really helful. I could change my character. I became moderate person because of him. That was really special experience.

강사 첨삭

I am so glad you have a mentor!

There are a lot of people who are deserving to give us good pieces of advice.

Nice one Adam, see you!

I have a mentor.

>>CORRECT!

He was a chairman of samsung though he retired last year.

>> He was one of the chairmen in Samsung though he retired last year.
We met once a month and had a conversation.

>>We used to meet once a month and have a conversation.

There were 10 students including me.

>>CORRECT!
He taught a lot of things about our appropriate action.

>>He taught a lot of things like appropriate action to different situations.

That was really helful.

>>That was really helpful.

I could change my character.

>>It has changed my character.
I became moderate person because of him.

>>I became a moderate person because of him.
That was really special experience.

>>That was a really special experience.

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