homework!
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Well, as I spoke to you, I major in Industrial designing and I'm a product designer. We usually work as organizing a team so teamwork is a very important element for designing work. In my opinion from experience, respecting individual talent is the most important thing to lead a group to success. respecting each other makes good mood in a team because it can help to make a successful result. I was a leader in an organization for annual exhibition. I tried to do hard with my team member with joyful and activity but I realized when we can't make good result we must be felt depressed and unsatisfied. A team is a group made to achieve the goal. Therefore, only if they must catch the success or goal, they can feel proud and happy. So In my thinking, good teamwork means making a good result and for that, they have to accept their individual talent.
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Hi, [이름]! (^^,)
Thank you for finding the time to write in our composition board.^
It\'s one thing to create a team, but quite another to create teamwork.
To put it simply, teams don\'t work without teamwork.
Teamwork serves as the glue that keeps a team together and the bond that promotes strength, unity, reliability and support.
The French language has an excellent expression to describe the word TEAMWORK and that is: ESPRIT DE CORPS. This means a sense of unity and enthusiasm for common interests and responsibilities in a group of people closely associated in a task, cause, or enterprise.
Teamwork is important because it creates synergy.
It supports a more empowered way of working and removes constraints which may prevent someone doing his or her job properly.
Team work also promotes a flatter and leaner structure, with less hierarchy.
It encourages multi-disciplinary work where teams cut across organizational divides.
Promoting teamwork in a group fosters flexibility and responsiveness, especially when the need to respond to change arise.
Finally, team work promotes a sense of achievement, camaraderie and equity which are all essential for a motivated workplace.
When managed properly, teamwork is a better way to work! ^^
I hope you have a wonderful day [이름].
See you on again tomorrow. Take care always.
~Teacher Charry (^^,)
Well, as I spoke to you, I major in Industrial designing and I\'m a product designer.
>> Well, I am currently majoring in Industrial designing and I\'m a product designer.
We usually work as organizing a team so teamwork is a very important element for designing work.
>> In my workplace, we usually work as a team so teamwork is a very important element in designing.
In my opinion from experience, respecting individual talent is the most important thing to lead a group to success.
>> In my opinion, respecting individual talent is the most important thing when leading a group to success.
OR >> From my experience, respecting individual talent is the most important thing when leading a group towards success.
respecting each other makes good mood in a team because it can help to make a successful result.
>> Respecting each other makes a good mood in a team and it can help achieve a successful result.
I was a leader in an organization for annual exhibition.
>> I was a leader in an organization for an annual exhibition.
OR >> I experienced being a leader in an organization for an annual exhibition.
I tried to do hard with my team member with joyful and activity but I realized when we can\'t make good result we must be felt depressed and unsatisfied.
>> [DO YOU MEAN]: I tried to work hard with my team members while maintaining a happy disposition. I realized that having bad results could leave us depressed and unsatisfied.
A team is a group made to achieve the goal.
>> A team is a group that\'s made to achieve a certain goal.
Therefore, only if they must catch the success or goal, they can feel proud and happy.
>> Therefore, feeling successful for achieving a goal, can make the whole team proud and happy.
So In my thinking, good teamwork means making a good result and for that, they have to accept their individual talent.
>> So In my opinion, good teamwork means coming up with a good result and for that, they have to accept the individual talents of each team member.
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