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2015-11-05 · 첨삭 강사 Charry

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Well, as I spoke to you, I major in Industrial designing and I'm a product designer. We usually work as organizing a team so teamwork is a very important element for designing work. In my opinion from experience, respecting individual talent is the most important thing to lead a group to success. respecting each other makes good mood in a team because it can help to make a successful result. I was a leader in an organization for annual exhibition. I tried to do hard with my team member with joyful and activity but I realized when we can't make good result we must be felt depressed and unsatisfied. A team is a group made to achieve the goal. Therefore, only if they must catch the success or goal, they can feel proud and happy. So In my thinking, good teamwork means making a good result and for that, they have to accept their individual talent.

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 Hi, [이름]! (^^,) Thank you for finding the time to write in our composition board.^ It\'s one thing to create a team, but quite another to create teamwork. To put it simply, teams don\'t work without teamwork. Teamwork serves as the glue that keeps a team together and the bond that promotes strength, unity, reliability and support. The French language has an excellent expression to describe the word TEAMWORK and that is: ESPRIT DE CORPS. This means a sense of unity and enthusiasm for common interests and responsibilities in a group of people closely associated in a task, cause, or enterprise. Teamwork is important because it creates synergy. It supports a more empowered way of working and removes constraints which may prevent someone doing his or her job properly. Team work also promotes a flatter and leaner structure, with less hierarchy.  It encourages multi-disciplinary work where teams cut across organizational divides. Promoting teamwork in a group fosters flexibility and responsiveness, especially when the need to respond to change arise. Finally, team work promotes a sense of achievement, camaraderie and equity which are all essential for a motivated workplace. When managed properly, teamwork is a better way to work! ^^ I hope you have a wonderful day [이름]. See you on again tomorrow. Take care always. ~Teacher Charry (^^,) Well, as I spoke to you, I major in Industrial designing and I\'m a product designer. >> Well, I am currently majoring in Industrial designing and I\'m a product designer. We usually work as organizing a team so teamwork is a very important element for designing work. >> In my workplace, we usually work as a team so teamwork is a very important element in designing. In my opinion from experience, respecting individual talent is the most important thing to lead a group to success. >> In my opinion, respecting individual talent is the most important thing when leading a group to success. OR >> From my experience, respecting individual talent is the most important thing when leading a group towards success. respecting each other makes good mood in a team because it can help to make a successful result. >> Respecting each other makes a good mood in a team and it can help achieve a successful result. I was a leader in an organization for annual exhibition. >> I was a leader in an organization for an annual exhibition.   OR >> I experienced being a leader  in an organization for an annual exhibition.   I tried to do hard with my team member with joyful and activity but I realized when we can\'t make good result we must be felt depressed and unsatisfied. >> [DO YOU MEAN]: I tried to work hard with my team members while maintaining a happy disposition.  I realized that having bad results could leave us depressed and unsatisfied. A team is a group made to achieve the goal. >> A team is a group that\'s made to achieve a certain goal. Therefore, only if they must catch the success or goal, they can feel proud and happy. >> Therefore, feeling successful for achieving a goal, can make the whole team proud and happy. So In my thinking, good teamwork means making a good result and for that, they have to accept their individual talent. >> So In my opinion, good teamwork means coming up with a good result and for that, they have to accept the individual talents of each team member.

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