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2015-11-11 · 첨삭 강사 Rose

학생이 쓴 원문

To be a good son or daughter, we should tell our parents smootly. Many children tell parents aggresively but it may hurts our parents. Also we should study hard. They hope that we will admit good university. So we should study hard until we get a job. It is difficult to be a perfect child but we should try to be a good child continuosly.

강사 첨삭

I am really impressed, Adam!

It only shows how well your parents raised you~

Thanks and have a great day, see you!

To be a good son or daughter, we should tell our parents smootly.

>>To be a good son or daughter, we should talk to our parents nicely.

Many children tell parents aggresively but it may hurts our parents.

>>Many children talk to their parents aggressively thereby hurting them.

Also we should study hard.

>>We should also study hard.

They hope that we will admit good university.

>>They hope that we will be admitted to a good university.

So we should study hard until we get a job.

>>Therefore, we should study hard until we get a job.

It is difficult to be a perfect child but we should try to be a good child continuosly.

>>It is difficult to be a perfect child but we should try to be a good child continuously.

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