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2015-11-18 · 첨삭 강사 Jeny

학생이 쓴 원문

It's very difficult question for me. I am thinking about the value of society. Our society supports the needs of people. Society makes rules to sustain the life of people. Society let people share their role. Anyway,: society continually doing something going well. As we see in this part, there is no reason to say society is losing its values. Because society is always busy to deal with something for people.

강사 첨삭

Hello [이름]

Thank you for opening my eyes to reality, Our society has a big role for its people.

I need to embrace my life. I know with God\'s help, we can overcome everything.
Nice job on you essay!!!!
T. Jeny
 

It\'s very difficult question for me.

>>correct
I am thinking about the value of society.

>>correct
Our society supports the needs of people.

>>correct
Society makes rules to sustain the life of people.

>>correct
Society let people share their role.

>>The society lets people share their role.
Anyway,: society continually doing something going well.
>>any way our society is continuously doing something for welfare.
As we see in this part, there is no reason to say society is losing its values.
>>As we experienced in this part, there is no reason why our society is losing its values.
Because society is always busy to deal with something for people.

>>Because they are doing something for the people.

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