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Hello [이름],

I hope you can express yourself more in writing an essay. It will really help you improve your skills in English.

I know that you do have a beautiful heart, that why you are beautiful inside and out.

Have the courage to study English because I know that you can speak the language well.

T. Jeny

ESSAY: What was your nicest dream that you can remember?
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A lot of people dream buying something to give these to their parents as a present such as clothes or underwear when they receive their salary at first time.

>>A lot of people dream of buying something for their parents as a present such as clothes or underwear when they receive their first salary.

It means they are thankful to their parents making them a good adult.

>>It means they are thankful to their parents for making them a good adult.
 So, when I was young, I also had a dream that I give some present to my parents.

>>So, when I was young, I also had a dream of giving some presents to my parents.
 About 5 years ago, as soon as I had my first salary from the previous company, I divided it and gave half to my mother and another to my father.

>> About 5 years ago, as soon as I had my first salary from my previous company, I divided it and gave half to my mother and another half to my father.
 It is the nicest dream that I can still remember.

>> It is the nicest dream and I can still remember.