homework!
학생이 쓴 원문
Happy Monday Chalie!!!
If I could change one thing in the world I would change boy preference
It could be wondered to west people but it exists in some cultures such as some Asia countries, and middle-east countries. It is common for them to live with that notion since it influenced by the Confucianism in case of Asia countries and religion in case of middle-east countries.
I think that is the reason hindered national development and that impeded cultural development as well because there were lots of sexual discriminations since old times. For one thing, in the past of Korea, women couldn’t participate in social activities at all. Besides, that have made so many great losses in history. As times change, it has been changing a lot however still women suffer difficulties in many places. It is one of the big issues in Korean society.
So I would like to get rid of this thought in the world if I could.
강사 첨삭
Happy Monday [이름]! ^^
Good job in writing about abolishing male chauvinism. I would think you\'re kind of a feminist. ~~~
Good work. See you later!
All good things,
==Charlie==
If I could change one thing in the world I would change boy preference
>> If I could change one thing in the world, it would be male chauvinism.
It could be wondered to west people but it exists in some cultures such as some Asia countries, and middle-east countries. It is common for them to live with that notion since it influenced by the Confucianism in case of Asia countries and religion in case of middle-east countries.
>> The western world might wonder if such a thing still exists nowadays but male chauvinistic ideology is strong in some Asia countries and well as in the middle east because of philosophical (i.e. Cunfucianism) and religious beliefs.
I think that is the reason hindered national development and that impeded cultural development as well because there were lots of sexual discriminations since old times. For one thing, in the past of Korea, women couldn’t participate in social activities at all. Besides, that have made so many great losses in history.
>> I think that this is the reason that hindered and impeded national and cultural development since sexism has been practiced back in the old times. One example is the history of Korea where women couldn\'t participate in social activities which resulted in great losses in history.
As times change, it has been changing a lot however still women suffer difficulties in many places. It is one of the big issues in Korean society.So I would like to get rid of this thought in the world if I could.
>> Although times have been changing nowadays, there are still women who are having difficulties about sexism and male supremacy and it is one of the biggest issues in Korean society. Therefore, I would like to get rid of this belief in the world if I could.
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