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2015-12-18 · 첨삭 강사 Anne

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We are definatly depending on on technology like smartphones because it is really convinient to search information or to do other things like buying groceries, taking pictures, finding the way I don't know ect. The most conviniece is that we can do many things with the phone we can bring anywhere. So most people are holding the phone even in the restroom.. Sometimes, I feel that it is like the technology is conquering and controling us.. so it makes me scared but most of time, I am really thankful to tech.. If we use it properly, this is the good chance that God gave to us.. 1. I have to buy a lot of furniture for my new apartment. 2. He brought up a lot of interesting points during the lecture. 3. After the party there was a lot of garbage. 4. Thank you so much for all the applause! 5. Your essays are due on September 15th.

강사 첨삭

Hi Miss [이름]!

I saw a picture of people all looking down on their phones while walking.

And the caption on the photo said: Zombie Apocalypse.

I laughed when I saw that, but at the same time I realized the message.

I am not sure, but sometimes we\'ve really failed to look at our surroundings because we are too busy with our smartphones.

But we can\'t really deny that technology has brought a lot of positive results.

Like for example, our class. I wouldn\'t have met you if not for technology.

And for that I am happy. *^^*

See you on Monday!

Teacher Anne

 

We are definatly depending on on technology like smartphones

>> We are definitely depending on technology like smartphones,

because it is really convinient to search information or to do other things

>> Correct! [convenient]

like buying groceries, taking pictures, finding the way I don\'t know ect.

>> Correct! [etc.]
The most conviniece is that we can do many things with the phone we can bring anywhere.

>> The best convenience we have is that we can do many things with the phone which we can bring anywhere.

So most people are holding the phone even in the restroom..

>> So most people are holding on to their phones even in the restroom.
Sometimes, I feel that it is like the technology is conquering and controling us..

>> Sometimes, I feel like technology is conquering and controlling us.
so it makes me scared but most of time, I am really thankful to tech..

>> So it makes me feel scared but most of the time, I am really thankful to our modern technology.
If we use it properly, this is the good chance that God gave to us..
>> Correct!
1. I have to buy a lot of furniture for my new apartment.
>> Correct!

2. He brought up a lot of interesting points during the lecture.

>> Correct!
3. After the party there was a lot of garbage.

>> Correct!
4. Thank you so much for all the applause!

>> Correct!
5. Your essays are due on September 15th.

>> Correct!

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