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학생이 쓴 원문
강사 첨삭
I totally agree with you, Sun Young!
Vacation really enhances performance so people really need it.
Without it, there will be no productive result in the future!
See you later~
ESSAY: Do you agree that vacation enhances performance?
I agree that vacation enhances perfornance.
>>I agree that vacation enhances performance.
Because if people constantly work without break, they can make some mistakes or get much stress.
>>CORRECT!
It makes people are tired and sick.
>>It makes people tired and sick.
Then people have to have some vacation to take a rest and relax.
>>CORRECT!
Besides, vacation will give us good ideas for people who need to make some creative things like marketers.
>>CORRECT!
Also, some people who are exhausted can refresh thier life from vacation or traveling.^^
>>Also, some people who are exhausted can refresh their life from vacation or traveling.^^
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