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2015-12-29 · 첨삭 강사 Rose

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Hi Teacher Rose. It's really close to end of year. Happy New Year! I was happy to study with you this year. Our class is finished this Wednesday. I'm going to start our class next Monday. I'm already close to my middle thirties. If I have a busy week, my body and mine get tired easily. After a busy week, I try to various thing energy up for my body and mind. First of all, I try to sleep for 10 hours. When I'm busy week and I have a stress, I prefer sleep. After sleep for a long time When I wake up, my body and mind getting fresh. Second after a busy week, my thought is complicated. I need to clear my head. Then I concertrate another thing. For example, I do nano block and I paint coloring book. I think we need to hobby for us. It make me concertrate only that when I'm confused. Lastly I sometimes go to amazing spot. Because When I go there, I can think a lot of thing. Then I can image new idea and refresh my mine.

강사 첨삭

Hi there Miss [이름]! Yes! Time is really fast! I never get tired of hearing your voice every morning ;) I am so happy to hear your wonderful voice^^ Hi Teacher Rose. >>CORRECT! It\'s really close to end of year. >>It\'s really close to the end of the year. Happy New Year! >>CORRECT! I was happy to study with you this year. >>CORRECT! Our class is finished this Wednesday. >>Our class will finish this Wednesday.  I\'m going to start our class next Monday. >>CORRECT!I\'m already close to my middle thirties. >>CORRECT!  If I have a busy week, my body and mine get tired easily. >> If I have a busy week, my body and mind get tired easily.  After a busy week, I try to various thing energy up for my body and mind. >>After a busy week, I try to various things to increase energy for my body and mind. First of all, I try to sleep for 10 hours. >>CORRECT! When I\'m busy week and I have a stress, I prefer sleep. >>When it is a busy week and I have stress, I prefer to sleep. After sleep for a long time When I wake up, my body and mind getting fresh. >>After sleeping for a long time and I wake up, my body and mind get refreshed. Second after a busy week, my thought is complicated. >>Second, after a busy week, my thought is complicated. I need to clear my head. >>CORRECT!  Then I concertrate another thing. >>Then I concentrate on another thing. For example, I do nano block and I paint coloring book. >>For example, I make nanoblocks and I paint coloring book. I think we need to hobby for us. >>I think we need a hobby. It make me concertrate only that when I\'m confused. >>It makes me concentrate only that when I\'m confused. Lastly I sometimes go to amazing spot. >>Lastly, I sometimes go to an amazing spot. Because When I go there, I can think a lot of thing. >>Because when I go there, I can think of a lot of things. Then I can image new idea and refresh my mine. >>Then I can imagine new idea and refresh my mind.

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