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2015-12-30 · 첨삭 강사 Marie

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Hello, teacher. Thank you for everything this year, teacher Marie. I thiink my English has been improved much thkank to you. I hope I would come back with great improvements. Again, happy new year!!^^ See you Feburary. Below is the rest of the abstract. A total of three conditions were required in order to justify the 1623 Coup in terms of Neo-Confucianism. Firstly, the former king must have great faults, and the second is that the servant who tries to dethrone the king must be a sage, regardless of whether he is a member of the royal family. The last is that the throne must be taken over by a sage among members of the royal family. However, king Injo did not meet the qualification for two kinds of role, namely the servant who can dethrone a king and also a new king after dethroning the king, which were required by Zhu Xi's dethrone theory. This shows that the 1623 Coup's Neo-Confucian legitimacy can never be justified.

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Hi Kaylee! I know that it\'s only a month, but I\'m already missing you. Study hard and do your best there! Make me proud! Please check my corrections below. Ciao! ~Teacher Marie~  Hello, teacher. >> CORRECT! Thank you for everything this year, teacher Marie. >> CORRECT! I thiink my English has been improved much thkank to you. >> I think my English has improved a lot, thanks to you. I hope I would come back with great improvements. >> I hope I would have more improvements when I come back.Again, happy new year!!^^ >> CORRECT! See you Feburary. >> See you in February.A total of three conditions were required in order to justify the 1623 Coup in terms of Neo-Confucianism. >> CORRECT! Firstly, the former king must have great faults, and the second is that the servant who tries to dethrone the king must be a sage, regardless of whether he is a member of the royal family. >> Firstly, the former king must have great faults, and the second is that the servant who tries to dethrone the king must be a sage, regardless of whether or not he is a member of the royal family. The last is that the throne must be taken over by a sage among members of the royal family. >> The last is that the throne must be taken over by a sage who is a member of the royal family. However, king Injo did not meet the qualification for two kinds of role, namely the servant who can dethrone a king and also a new king after dethroning the king, which were required by Zhu Xi\'s dethrone theory. >> However, King Injo did not meet the qualifications for the two kinds of role, namely the servant who can dethrone a king and also a new king after dethroning the king, which were required by Zhu Xi\'s dethrone theory. This shows that the 1623 Coup\'s Neo-Confucian legitimacy can never be justified. >> CORRECT!

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