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학생이 쓴 원문
I think I already said that I got prize in university. However I’m gonna tell you about how I got it in detail.
When I was in junior in university I took a class requiring to take an active part in project with class mate.
And I made a group with two people. In the class we should choice one thing we want to solve as a role of designer and we could combiine soon.
As considering publicity, we found out that people aren’t follow walking on the right on the stairs and it caused crowd like underground shopping center or subway station.So we made a decision to make line leads direction and realized in simulation. Fortunately we could hand in our result to awards of public design at the right
Time. Surprisingly we could be third winner and I remember it made me spend happy time at the end of the year
강사 첨삭
Hello [이름]! ^^
Happy new year!~~~
Good work in writing about how you won a prize back in university. ^^
See you later!
All good things,
==Teacher Charlie==
I think I already said that I got prize in university. However I’m gonna tell you about how I got it in detail.
>> I think I already mentioned winning a prize in university but I\'m going to tell you about how I managed to win it in detail.
When I was in junior in university I took a class requiring to take an active part in project with class mate.And I made a group with two people.
>> When I was a junior in university, I was taking a class that required a group project so I formed a group with two classmates.
In the class we should choice one thing we want to solve as a role of designer and we could combiine soon.>> In that project, we could choose a problem we would want to solve and combine it with being a designer.
As considering publicity, we found out that people aren’t follow walking on the right on the stairs and it caused crowd like underground shopping center or subway station.So we made a decision to make line leads direction and realized in simulation.
>> The problem we observed is how people don\'t follow the \"keep-right\" rule while walking on the stairs causing crowding in public places like underground shopping centers or in subway stations so we made a solution of making lines in the passing lanes and cheching the effectivity of it through simulations.
Fortunately we could hand in our result to awards of public design at the right Time. Surprisingly we could be third winner and I remember it made me spend happy time at the end of the year
>> Fortunately, we were able to hand in our project results just in time and surprisingly, we placed third. Remembering this memory made me happy at the end of the year.
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