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2016-02-01 · 첨삭 강사 Jeny

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Sometimes I like to be famous. When I feel that life is boring, I want to make something funny affair. I imagine that If I were a famous person to be. The things that someone admired me is to make me nervous and tension but It is help me to live righteously a little bit. Because everyone always look at me. I might be fun a little bit thought inconveniently.

강사 첨삭

Hello [이름]!

Thank you for expressing your opinion about our topic. I guess being famous entails bigger responsibility as well.

I know that you have the determination to achieve your goals in life.

Just put your best foot forward in order for you to be successful.

Have a great day!!!

T.Jeny

 

Sometimes I like to be famous.

>>correct
When I feel that life is boring, I want to make something funny affair.

>>When I feel that life is boring, I want to make something funny.
I imagine that If I were a famous person to be.

>>I am imagining what if I am a famous person.
The things that someone admired me is to make me nervous and tension but It is help me to live righteously a little bit.

>>It will make me nervous if someone will admire me but I could also help me live a righteous life.
Because everyone always look at me.

>>Because I know that everybody is looking at me.
I might be fun a little bit thought inconveniently.

>>It might be fun but it could inconvenient as well.

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