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2016-02-02 · 첨삭 강사 Kathrine

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Composition: The best way to motivate people is through money. In my opinion, I agreed. I think money is very important in our lives. Without money, human can't anything. In my cases, my children always want a lot of things to buy. So, I say "If you want someting, you have to improve your grades."

강사 첨삭

Hello Ms. [이름]! Thank you for sharing your thoughts about our topic.

Well, maybe when it comes to motivating people, I guess it depends on the situation if money is needed or not.

But maybe in your case, money is needed since you have to motivate your children to study hard. My mother usually does that to my little sisters too. kkk. Anyway, thank you for today and see you again tomorrow.. have a great day ahead!

Always,

Kathrine ^^

Composition: The best way to motivate people is through money.

In my opinion, I agreed.

>> I agree with the topic.
I think money is very important in our lives.

>> correct!

Without money, human can\'t anything.

>> Without money, human do can\'t anything.
In my cases, my children always want a lot of things to buy.

>> In my case, my children always want to buy a lot of things.
So, I say \"If you want someting, you have to improve your grades.\"

>> So I told them, \"If you want something, you have to improve your grades.\"

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