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학생이 쓴 원문
Society has been changing even if this is a moment.
Only, we can't follow the variation.
It is more serious in development of technology.
A new technology influences new generation but the old feel difficult to learn technology society.
It causes generation gap.
And we have problems which can't understand each other.
We need endeavor to shorten this gap from technology.
강사 첨삭
Hello [이름], Nice way of you to explain your opinion.Aim for success, not perfection. Never give up your right to be wrong, because then you will lose the ability to learn new things and move forward with your life. The ability to learn new things is a step forward to aim high and reach for your goals.
T. Jeny
Society has been changing even if this is a moment.
>>Society has been changing even from this this moment.Only, we can\'t follow the variation.
>>We can only follow the variation.It is more serious in development of technology.
>>It is more serious in developing technology.A new technology influences new generation but the old feel difficult to learn technology society.
>>New technology influences the new generation but unfortunately the old generation is having a hard time to adapt.It causes generation gap.
>>correctAnd we have problems which can\'t understand each other.
>>And misunderstanding between each other occurs.We need endeavor to shorten this gap from technology.
>>We need to lessen this endeavour.
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