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I heard Korea is the most obesity country in Asia from news. But. actually in my surroundings, There are no too obesity person. It is true. Obesity rate is more rising. They are always worried about gaining weigh. They do all the time diet for their slim body. The reason that Obesity is a problem is to attack our health for a long time very slowly. Sustaining proper body weigh is very important. Because obesity cause another major diseases. Only even though losing weigh is helping for our health. The thing that the people is not health is equal the country is not health.

Hi! You have done a great job in finishing your homework. You have great ideas too. I\'m sure with more practice, you\'d be able to express your thoughts more. Have a nice day! T. Jeny Here are my corrections: I heard Korea is the most obesity country in Asia from news. >>I heard from the news that Korea has the most number of obese people in Asia. But. actually in my surroundings, There are no too obesity person.>>But actually in my surroundings, I don\'t see that many obese people. It is true. Obesity rate is more rising. >>It is true that the rate of obesity is increasing.They are always worried about gaining weigh. >>People are always worried about gaining weight. They do all the time diet for their slim body. >>They do all sorts of diet for a slimmer body. The reason that Obesity is a problem is to attack our health for a long time very slowly.>>The reason that Obesity is a problem is that it attacks our health for a long time very slowly. Sustaining proper body weigh is very important. >>Maintaining proper body weight is very important. Because obesity cause another major diseases. Only even though losing weigh is helping for our health. The thing that the people is not health is equal the country is not health. >>Obesity can cause other major diseases. Although losing weight is helpful for our health, the thing is that if the people are not healthy it is equal to the country being unhealthy.