homework
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It's Wednesday Charlie!!!
When it comes to building a new university, I usually thought it would be not good way because there are already a lot of universities in everywhere. I have started thinking of it since I prepared for university. At the time, I could find that so many unfamiliar universities exist and there are many similar majors as well. And I wondered how they operate it well because I read some articles which were about universities went under. So I undoubtedly thought it must be a waste of land and money. However, building a new university can bring some advantages. For example, in terms of local economy it can make positive effects like establishing new university in region which faces shortages and an ageing population and also it will be helpful to secure commercial.
There are obvious advantages and disadvantages. As a result, I think the government and communities have to make an analysis and judgment carefully not to overlook the quality of education.
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Good job in expressing your opinion in this essay! ^^
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==Teacher Charlie==
When it comes to building a new university, I usually thought it would be not good way because there are already a lot of universities in everywhere.
>> When it comes to building a new university, I would think it might not be a good idea since there are already a lot of universities around.
I have started thinking of it since I prepared for university. At the time, I could find that so many unfamiliar universities exist and there are many similar majors as well. And I wondered how they operate it well because I read some articles which were about universities went under. So I undoubtedly thought it must be a waste of land and money.
>> I undoubtedly think that building a new university would be a waste of landspace and money and I have had that opinion even before I started going to university. At that time, I discovered so many unfamiliar universities I didn\'t think existed who offered similar majors that got me wondering how did they operate. I also have read some articles about universities that have gone under.
However, building a new university can bring some advantages. For example, in terms of local economy it can make positive effects like establishing new university in region which faces shortages and an ageing population and also it will be helpful to secure commercial.
>> However, building a new university could have its advantages. For example, in terms of local economy, with job shortages and the ageing population, building a new university could give new opportunities.
There are obvious advantages and disadvantages. As a result, I think the government and communities have to make an analysis and judgment carefully not to overlook the quality of education.
>> There are plenty of advantages and disadvantages to this so I think that the government and the communiy involved should make a careful analysis and judgment without sacrificing quality of education.
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