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2016-04-05 · 첨삭 강사 Lynn

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I disagree. Nowadays human can live for a long time until 100 age. I think 65 years of age is youth in our life. They can't get their new job dispite youth. After many old people retire, they have a lot of stress because of money. When their children are young, they have to take care of their children. During they take care of their children, they have to spend a lof of money for their children, so they don't have enough money for themself. So I think that they need job until 80 age.

강사 첨삭

Hello Ms. [이름]! Wow! It\'s already the middle of the week. Time sure flies fast. Well, Koreans are known to live a long life unlike us Filipinos. So I guess you\'re right. You need to keep working until you can to provide for your needs specially if you are still strong and healthy at the age of 65. Hopefully, your government could do something about this. Talk to you later! ~T. Lynn   I disagree. >>correctNowadays human can live for a long time until 100 age. >>Nowadays, humans can live for a long time until the age of 100.I think 65 years of age is youth in our life. >>I think 65 years of age is still young.They can\'t get their new job dispite youth. >> They can\'t get a new job despite being young.After many old people retire, they have a lot of stress because of money. >>correct OR>> After retirement, many people get stressed out because of money.When their children are young, they have to take care of their children. >> When their children were young, they have to take care of them.During they take care of their children, they have to spend a lof of money for their children, so they don\'t have enough money for themself. >> While taking care of their children, they have to spend a lot of money for their children, so they don\'t have enough money for themselves.So I think that they need job until 80 age. >>So I think that they need a job until age 80. OR>> So I think that they need to work until the age of 80.

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