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Hello Charlie! I wonder the meaning of roin and this sentence structure from last your correction Comparing that example to my brother who didn't play much and is shorter than him although our parents are tall. While I read what I needed to me, suddenly depilatory came across my mind. Probably that’s why summer is coming up. I think my hair under the arm grows so fast and I care it for every season. Even though I don’t wear short sleeve t shirt or any other thing I remove this because I don’t want to see it. Moreover in summer, my armpit easily gets sweaty. It is so stressful in summer season. I have tried applying deodorant on that so far but it didn’t work so I realized I need something stronger than this. I didn’t try to undergo surgical procedure yet, however from my friend’s experience it also didn’t work well. Therefore I would like to invent an effective ointment type of depilatory with deodorant to restrain growth of body hair for a while if I could.

Hello [이름]! ^^   Thank you answering the composition topic. ^^ Okay, let\'s get down to business. Let us first mince the paragraph and then break down the sentence in questions. ^^   TOPIC SENTENCES  ---> Some advantages that can be cited is the growth spurt attained in playing sports. SUPPORTING SENTENCE  ---> For example, I have a cousin who enjoys playing basketball eversince he was young and as a result, his height is more than 185cm although his parents aren\'t that tall. SUPPORTING SENTENCE (that gives more detail and emphasis about the previous sentence by providing contrast.) ---> Comparing that example to my brother who didn\'t play much and is shorter than him although our parents are tall.   BREAKDOWN OF THE SENTENCE: basically, the sentence is illustrating your point. It adds more detail and contrast to your first supporting sentence which is the example about your cousin.   >> COMPARE THAT EXAMPLE TO... ---> is a phrase that refers to the previous sentence (i.e. \"For example, I have a cousin....\"). Think of it as a point of reference. >> MY BROTHER WHO DIDN\'T PLAY MUCH (BASKETBALL)  ---> Since we already made a point of reference, we can omit the use of reiterative phrases and/or phrases.   >> (MY BROTHER) IS SHORTER THAN HIM ALTHOUGH OUR PARENTS ARE TALL  ---> To make a sentence more interesting, we use a compound complex sentence structure where we combine two clauses (this clause and the previous one) whilst omitting reiterative phrases and/or phrases because of our point of reference. ^^   I hope this helps. I tried to explain it best I can. ^^ Don\'t worry so much about sentence structure though; believe me when I say that the more your practice, making sentences would be so natural that you don\'t need to sweat out the small stuff. ^^   All good things, ==Teacher Charlie==   While I read what I needed to me, suddenly depilatory came across my mind. Probably that’s why summer is coming up. I think my hair under the arm grows so fast and I care it for every season. >> While brooding over what I need most, depilation suddenly crossed my mind probably because summer is coming up. I thought of depilation since in my estimation, my armpit hair grows rapidly and I care for it every season. Even though I don’t wear short sleeve t shirt or any other thing I remove this because I don’t want to see it. >> Even when I don\'t wear short sleeved shirt or anything sleeveless, I shave it all off since I think it\'s unsightly.   Moreover in summer, my armpit easily gets sweaty. It is so stressful in summer season. I have tried applying deodorant on that so far but it didn’t work so I realized I need something stronger than this. I didn’t try to undergo surgical procedure yet, however from my friend’s experience it also didn’t work well. >> More so in the summer. This season is quite stressful since my armpits easily gets sweaty and I have tried applying deodorant but it hasn\'t worked the way I wanted it too and I realized I needed something stronger. I haven\'t undergone medical treatments yet but according to my friend, it also didn\'t give the expected results.   Therefore I would like to invent an effective ointment type of depilatory with deodorant to restrain growth of body hair for a while if I could. >> Therefore, if I can I would like to invent an effective depilating ointment of some sort which also deodorizes.