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2016-12-20 · 첨삭 강사 Lynn

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I think that poor countries should have their debts forgiven. However only for special cases like if the country is no longer able to develop again then I will say yes. On the other hand, if the country is moving forward in a positive way, then no. Rich countries are already capable to handle different kind of economic situations and they can help other countires that are in need for help. So they could forgive poor countries' debt. Yet, it should not be they 'should' forgive. It is not their business to take care of. Of course they can help, but i think it is better to help them like instead of forgiving debt, they could help to make the better situations. Because if rich countries forgive all the debts for poor countries, governments and citizen of a poor countries could feel that they do not need to work hard or save money because somebody could do that for them. Also they could take that for granted. So i think instead of forgiving debts, helping different way will be better.

강사 첨삭

Hello there [이름]!

A blessed Thursday to you!

I actually think the same as you. Helping is good but the person you are helping should do something to help himself first. You\'re right, if rich countries just give money to poor countries it might make them lazy. They\'ll just depend on the help of these countries which is not good.

Talk to you later!

~T. Lynn

 

I think that poor countries should have their debts forgiven.

>>correct

However only for special cases like if the country is no longer able to develop again then I will say yes.

>> However, only for special cases like if the country can no longer develop again then I will say yes.

On the other hand, if the country is moving forward in a positive way, then no.

>> correct

Rich countries are already capable to handle different kind of economic situations and they can help other countires that are in need for help.

>> Rich countries are already capable to handle different kinds of economic situations and so they can help other countries that are in need of help.

So they could forgive poor countries\' debt. Yet, it should not be they \'should\' forgive. It is not their business to take care of.

>>correct

Of course they can help, but i think it is better to help them like instead of forgiving debt, they could help to make the better situations.

>>Of course they can help, but I think it is better to help them in other ways instead of forgiving their debts, they could do something to make the situation better.

Because if rich countries forgive all the debts for poor countries, governments and citizen of a poor countries could feel that they do not need to work hard or save money because somebody could do that for them.

>>Because if rich countries forgive all the debts of poor countries, governments and citizens of poor countries would feel that they do not need to work hard or save money because somebody could do that for them.

Also they could take that for granted. So i think instead of forgiving debts, helping different way will be better.

>>Also, they could take that for granted. So, I think instead of forgiving debts, helping them in a different way is better.

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