homework
학생이 쓴 원문
These days many people become dry with their emotion.
Also they want bad news and hot news.
I think that many people become to have dry feeling because of games.
When we watch warm news, our emotion can change warm.
I really want it.
강사 첨삭
Hello there Ms. [이름]!
Thank you for always doing your homework. You are right. Nowadays, people don\'t care much about other people. They tend to focus more on work and on themselves.
Have a great day!
~T. Lynn
These days many people become dry with their emotion.
>>These days, many people become emotionless.Also they want bad news and hot news.
>>They also want to hear about bad news and the latest news. I think that many people become to have dry feeling because of games.
>> I think many people become emotionless because of online games.When we watch warm news, our emotion can change warm.
>> When we watch touching news, our emotion can change.I really want it.
>>I really want that.
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