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2016-04-11 · 첨삭 강사 Charlie

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I prefer items made by machine whatever it is because I like something neat and clean. And there are some reasons that I prefer it. First of all, most of stuffs made by machine are cheaper than handiworks because of mass production. Price is always important for customers to choose products when they do shop and I also consider it when I go shopping. Next, I like clean finishing of items including appliances, clothing, devices etc. line and shape of stuffs are sharp and neat since they are always same according to a manual. And also it is one of the factors choosing items when I buy something. Moreover as a personal preference, it made me enter a university of product design. On the other hand sometimes, some items made by hand are better like wooden furniture, and accessories. Instead, most of things are much more expensive than industrial products because of hand work. That’s why many luxury goods brand’s items are extremely expensive. In short, I prefer items made by machine.

강사 첨삭

Hello [이름]! ^^   Thank you for your essay that illustrated why you prefer smokestack goods. ~~~ Feel free to ask if you have any clarifications, questions, suggestions and any sort of concern. ^^   See you later!   All good things, ==Teacher Charlie==        I prefer items made by machine whatever it is because I like something neat and clean. And there are some reasons that I prefer it. >> I generally prefer machine-made items because I like things to be neat and clean aside from the following reasons below;   First of all, most of stuffs made by machine are cheaper than handiworks because of mass production. Price is always important for customers to choose products when they do shop and I also consider it when I go shopping. >> Firstly, most streamlined goods are cheaper than hand-made ones since they are mass-produced and I, like other customers, consider price as the greatest importance when I shop.   Next, I like clean finishing of items including appliances, clothing, devices etc. line and shape of stuffs are sharp and neat since they are always same according to a manual. And also it is one of the factors choosing items when I buy something. Moreover as a personal preference, it made me enter a university of product design. >> Secondly, I like impeccably made items such as appliances, clothes, and gadgets to name a few. These goods are all uniformly made since they are all done by the manual. To digress, this is one of the many reasons why I took up product design in university.   On the other hand sometimes, some items made by hand are better like wooden furniture, and accessories. Instead, most of things are much more expensive than industrial products because of hand work. That’s why many luxury goods brand’s items are extremely expensive. >> On the other hand, some products are better handmade for example wooden furniture and accessories like a Galliano handmade bag or some other luxury brand. This is why these goods are, most of the time, extremely expensive because of the labor put into them.   In short, I prefer items made by machine. >> In conclusion, I prefer factory made products.

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